Careless Care

This is too, a composition with definite ideas. And with such young age of the composer, it's already a high achiever, with refined simplicity.

The music is about past memory of love. The picture of memory like "putting arm around you" is love  in its youth, and of such purity of a teenager. And I would certainly like to maintain such character that belong to the composer.

Yet, as memory drawn closer, some moments of intrigue are recalled. Such moments suggested hidden story, that the composer would not like to mention further. Such expression mean to be implicit, however, to the extend of certain obscurity in music itself ( unexpressed ), so that as the music develops, as the lens of memory drawn closer and clearer, it's not satisfied.

So despite the overall satisfying effect of the original music arrangement, further study the content of the lyrics, may arouse a willingness to explore such intrigue itself with music. If the composer wish to, within the frame of implicit nature.

The sections of repeated melodic line hasn't too many variations, in the composition , however, it's development is fully supported by guitar part, which I appreciate as a conscious arrangement from a young composer, refined and effective, and well tailored to suit himself.

My suggestion to current version itself, is to handle a little bit more on the repeated part of " Careless" and "careful" twice. They may need certain degree of variation in melody line, and can add certain kind of tensed emotion. And I hope these two words can be heard in music of both times, as of definite expression.

If I were to handle them, I may handle the twice also of different meaning. With the first time, "careless" implicates, certain blame, and "careful" tolerance . With the second time, "careful" more implication of blame than "careless".  Here is where the lyric stops, however , emotional has been push up to the summit, then I would like to add up your guitar solo, at least twice or three times of current length, like ebbing emotion that gradually draw further from memory. Current ending I feel somewhat abrupt.

For the performance, I certainly enjoy the guitar part, and hope you also develop it as your strength, so that's why I suggest adding more guitar solo at the end . The arrangement of guitar part, is the full support of development of the music, which I think effective and simple, and it's tailored to compensate the limitation in your vocal.

Vocally, you need more training, despite you have a very naturally expressive voice, it lack the capacity of strength according to further development of music. So your vocal expression is limited by technique, so I assume that your composition would certainly be taken frequently. However, as you can sing, you can certainly sing better.

So apart from certain alteration I suggested in composition in key spot, I suggest a good focus on performance.

The vocal range is certainly of your best, so your talent itself is expressive. When we talk about vocal range, we certainly talk about range of effective expression, here even a trained female voice cannot replace.

But you certainly need more breathing exercises, more diaphragm support , more physical exercises to build useful muscles, and increase your lung capacity so that later your voice will have more capacity of expression.

We should learn from those "celebrity" singers, as what they can do is technically hard to be criticised. So that I do suggest you to achieve a perfect pitch as well, despite I cannot spot in this recording any definite tone is out of tune, but I wish you to be more conscious. And practice scales every day.

There's also something can be picked in your performance- you unconscious speeding. In fact, I'm very happy with the opening tempo ,as it's expressive, but as music goes, you unconsciously speed up.

A second thing, is certain rubato from you, is not based on strict beats. This phenomenon, is usually happen in talent young performers. And I , myself , also have such problem when I was young. However , you need to trim your frame. You need to firstly count very beat and even half beat very precise, then later on to feel the beat. Then you will develop a sense of impulse within music itself. Then that is "rubato" of real music meaning, that means your rhythm will truly carry your music as a vehicle. I hope this will also be included in your guitar study.  I would suggest you to study music before Classical, like Mozart and Bach . As I wonder the repertoire in popular music wouldn't be able to give enough education on rhythm.

So in performance, I would suggest you have definite target with both vocal, and your guitar. With your vocal , build up the physical capability, and basic vocal technique, intonation. While in guitar, you may play tunes that needs strict rhythm. You may also train with help of metron and tuner.

And certainly, another way to improve your current version, is to develop your performance. Sometimes, it's regretful, that talent youth often lack of training, while well trained celebrities often as mechanical as robot.